Well...
I like the premis, cause Kirby is the pimp-daddy supreme! But, well... there were some things I found lacking:
-The white squares around your sprites... It really makes things look amateurish and breaks the illusion that you try to create.
-The sound was a bit off.
-The text was often hard to read, since it scrolled by way too fast, might want to slow it down some or add a button to let you scroll through.
Overall, I give it a 1, cause damn those white squares just kill it for me.